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[talktooloose]

I wrote! I wrote good!

It's not DOB, so sorry fic fans. I'll start writing 17 next week. Of course, there's a chance that 16 (which is with the betas) will be 16 and 17. We'll know in a week one way or another because I'll post something. In that case, I'll be starting 18 next week.

No, I'm writing a new version of a fascist old fable and de-fascisizing it. I was determined that it not end up more than 2000 words but I've just hit the 2/3 mark and I'm at 2700 words. So... it won't be more than 3500 words and that seems doable.

Heh, one of the characters in it obsessively counts wheat grains and has arbitrary but meaningful numbers he wants to collect.

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[lux-apollo.livejournal.com]

:-)

As for 16, I've done my first read-through. I don't know if you should separate the opening sequence. It's a little short... if anything, it should have been part of the last chapter, even though it doesn't fit their either. I think it works fine where it is... The timeline is a little jarring at first, but that immediacy was needed. If anything, you could have spent more time on the *getting to him* part of that sequence. As you often tell me, it is better to *tell* it than to speak in flashback...

Part of me really wants that first sequence to stand alone because it is such a key event (even if J downplays the significance what happens at the end of the scene later in the chapter). I'm not sure what would be right. Obviously I don't think you want to rewrite that opening to expand it too much.

Meh. As always, you will decide what works best.

[talktooloose.livejournal.com]

I look forward to your beta. I think I know exactly how to pump the first bit up into a decent if small chapter.

[lux-apollo.livejournal.com]

I think what you would need to add in will write itself. Just reading it, I had a billion ideas of what I would do myself to build it up. Which I won't tell you, because I don't want to skew your muse.